She is 84 years old, but you would never guess that looking at her or spending anytime with her. She looks 70 but still acts 60. She is very active and just got done working 3 years ago.
She has had multiple back surgeries, knee and hip replacements. She has had three different kinds of cancers. She beat it every time, even having a breast removed.
She is one of the strongest women I know. She worked so very hard her whole life to take care of her daughter that was born with major heart issues. She died about 10 years ago.
She lives alone with her dog and still goes to Vermont with her ladies group 3 times a year. She still drives a car and quit well I will add. She doesn’t like night driving so much anymore.
The warmth of her hugs touches my soul every time. She always smells wonderful crisp and clean like some time of powder smell. She has always smelled this way. She always wears mauve lipstick no matter if she is staying home or going out. I truly love my grandmother and look up to her so very much.
I like the details you choose to give the reader, especially in the last graf, especially about the powder smell, a smell which must take you back to some of your earliest memories.
ReplyDeleteThe detail in the next to last graf are good too as far as they go, but could be pushed harder: does she own a Great Dane or a toy poodle: the answer tells us a lot! But we never get that.
And what does she do in Vermont? Tour in a bus? Go to crafts fairs to sell her knitting? Go antiquing? Again, the answers would have helped further our understanding.
You see how that could have worked?
I do see that now. Should I rewrite?
ReplyDeleteNo rewrite needed.
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